descriptive writing

The hunter crept through the dark pine-forest, waiting for a deer to approach. The leaves crunched underneath his boot's like fire works crackling.

what did i do well ?

what did i learn ?

what is my next learning step?

My P.I assessment

Expert
 Shows weeks of work
 Audience is very interested
 I've done the work myself
 Research in my words – with my personality in it
 Contains humour(?)
 Interaction with the audience
 Speech is confident, clear and with action and expression

Practititioner
 Shows three or four weeks of work
 Contains pictures and steps
 Information is interesting and in my own words
 Adults have supported me without doing work for me
 Some humour
 Some interaction
 Audience is attentive
 Speech is clear

Apprentice
 Shows about a week’s work
 A little information – some in my own words
 Adults have done some of it for me
 No interaction with the audience
 No humour
 Poor presentation
 Few pictures

Novice
 Reads the words on the PowerPoint or GlogClearly started at the last minute Hardly any info
 Parents have done a lot of it for me
 No pictures or steps
 Copied straight off the internet
 No humour
 Not finished on time
 Untidy presentation
 Speech is not very clear

P. I class feedback

I love the presentation method you've used. It's really well set out and clear. The science you've carried out is good, but you should have shown your hypothesis/es. Your pictures are great. Really good investigation, Thomas. TC

I did the same thing and got same results great P.I tom harry chaz

i think that you did well in your speaking.It was very good but the idea of it was a bit strange.well done with your idea Alana &linda

Cool idea Thomas but next time speak more clearly and loudly, but great job anyway! Maddy and Zia

That was a interesting PI but we were sad that the eggs didn't turn purple at all but still we were intrested.Well done!!!!! Nat,Kelly and Britt

Cool PI Thomas But next time talk louder and tell us abit more info but anyway it was a cool PI. Lucy and Grace

Cool P.I thomas. it looked like the outside of the yolk had turned purple. Corbin,Alan

your pi was very interesting.i really enjoyed your PI and I really liked the idea of the egg shape. natalya and emma

Good P.I Thomas purple eggs would have been so cool its good that you didn't give up once you found out it didn't work and you should try and find out another way to make eggs purple Good job Thomas. Kate and Libby

sweet PI Thomas make sure those chooks liked that beetroot and we would just like to say you did awsome with your PI so congrats thomas!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111 caelum and mike

cool and funny. aidan

great pi !!! ne Sara,Sophie,Hannah

good pi thomas i liked that you done something that you wanted to do kale

Maths

My best visual langauge

I chose this visual language because it is my most interesting one.